Noble Korhedron posted a comment on Saturday 3rd August 2013 10:31am for The Victorious Horcrux

Hmmm, v. interesting ending. Are you sure it's not a bit of a deus ex machina though?

Nytefyre posted a comment on Wednesday 13th March 2013 8:40am for The Victorious Horcrux

Interesting reverse on the horcrux with a well thought out precept and framework for enactment. This was wholly believable given that, and well written to boot. Many thanks for posting.

Erik Wiggins posted a comment on Friday 8th February 2008 8:59pm for The Victorious Horcrux

What a delightful story! Thank you! I think you are a great and talented writer!

cwejr posted a comment on Monday 24th December 2007 10:19am for The Victorious Horcrux

WOW! Excellent story. Wish I had run into it earlier.

Jimbocous posted a comment on Monday 12th November 2007 9:52am for The Victorious Horcrux

Nicely-done one-shot. Great concepts; this could easily stand as a full-length story. I know I'd love to see you develop it further. Certainly a unique solution to the Harry-is-a-horcrux dilemma. As always, thanks for your efforts.

LoggingInSucksAss posted a comment on Saturday 21st July 2007 12:01pm for The Victorious Horcrux

You're not my favorite author. I haven't read all your stories; the paladin fics, for example, are too involved and slow to update for me to get into as a WIP. (that's a hint to update, BTW)

But when you hit a home run, you can knock out a story that stands at or near the top of my favorites reading lists for months or years. I -still- tell people to read Makers of Fine Wands, even if they're not into Potterfic. It's just that good of a tale.

This too is a home run. It's a little rough, it reads too much like a summary, but it's a brilliantly plotted and descriptive journey through "what could have been" in the Potter universe.

As always, I thank you for sharing with the rest of us. :)

Deborahsu posted a comment on Saturday 21st July 2007 11:40am for The Victorious Horcrux

You have a way of writing minute detail in a way that's compelling to read. Truly amazing! You explain the unexplainable in plain words. Are you a teacher? Of quantum physics, perhaps? :-)

Infin1x posted a comment on Thursday 19th July 2007 1:15pm for The Victorious Horcrux

Very nice, a bit different. The end felt a bit rushed like it should have been a more detailed but it got the point across.

vila posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 7:04pm for The Victorious Horcrux

This fic was extremely original and well thought out, somehow diminishing neither harry's valour and virtue nor voldemort's power and wickedness. and the technical explanations carrying an arcane tone enhances the thesis like feel of the fic. i was very impressed and continually surprised by the facts of the story as they unravelled. my one doubt regarding this fic: why did voldemort's soul make harry's body kill peter pettigrew? was it to make pettigrew's death a means of making harry's horcrux? if so voldemort should have known that pettigrew was not prepared to be a horcrux!

Verahsa posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 2:02pm for The Victorious Horcrux

I've been an avid follower of the Paladin Program Parallel Universes for a long time now, and have been pleased with your work there. You always have a rather nice way with words, especially descriptions of the non-physical aspects of a story, that allows your readers to almost entirely immerse themselves in your story.

This piece is no exception. Well written, although not as fleshed out as I may have hoped, this was a very plausible and fun piece to read. I would have liked to have seen more character interaction, something I honestly feel you have a knack for, than was present.

Regardless, this was a very fun read that stayed well within the realms of believability from canon. Thank you for your continuing efforts in writing fanfiction. :)

KateHC posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 5:39am for The Victorious Horcrux

An interesting concept and a well crafted story.

millercommamatt posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 4:02am for The Victorious Horcrux

This was a different take on how fanfiction normally works. I like it. This reminds me of something I might have tried to write. As a scientist, I've always wondered if I could pull off writing Harry Potter fanfiction as a technical paper. This is the closest thing to that I've seen to date.

hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 3:13am for The Victorious Horcrux

An interesting story and idea but I really have a problem with Harry/Horcrux. It opens a lot of questions, specially about the bad moments in his life and how Voldemort could really control him. And why Riddle didn't notice his souls in Harry when he possess him in the DoM? I don't know, but I think I prefer a different explanation for this mess.

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 12:41am for The Victorious Horcrux

Thanks for fixing the centering. :-)

The word "ethos" as used in this doesn't seem appropriate, given the definitions I find. Perhaps you meant ether?

The soul vs spirit idea is interesting and the over all story line is good. And, as always, your writing is excellent.

However, I found the form felt a little off.

The first half--except the Snape scene--felt like a history piece. Then it changed to more active story telling--from 'telling' us what happened to 'showing' us.

A larger division, like a chapter break, after he grabbed the locket might have helped ease the transition in story telling style.

And I have to agree with the other reviewer that commented on the amount of repetition. In a multi-chapter serial, such repetition is often welcome to remind the reader of important forgotten details. But in a one-shot, it's a bit much.

I hope I don't sound too critical--it is a good story and I did enjoy it. Thanks for sharing it with us.

warpwizard posted a comment on Wednesday 18th July 2007 12:31am for The Victorious Horcrux

Nice self-contained story. Thanks for writing.

amulder posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 11:16pm for The Victorious Horcrux

Brilliant. Original. well paced.

But I do wish you had NOT centered the entire text. :-(

I have not come across any other story that theorized that Dumbledore had created a horcrux of himself at the end of HBP. Quite a creative idea!

best
...art

Aaran St Vines replied:

Thanks for pointing that out, Art. It wasn't like that when it first posted, and the code I sent did NOT do that. It's fixed now. Oh well, stuff happens, even on the Internet. Thanks for reading and reviewing. Cheers!

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 10:43pm for The Victorious Horcrux

Very nice,and enjoy your views and resaoning on how things work in the HP 'verse, and looking forward to your other stories as well.

swell posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 7:04pm for The Victorious Horcrux

Just beautiful, as always

knightsbridge posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 5:36pm for The Victorious Horcrux

I may, in point of fact, be sick to death of possible endings....death, happily ever after with Ginny etc, BUT if jo can muster up an ending 1/2 as good as the one you gave us, I will be VERY surprised. Personally, I think she's sick of the whole thing (except the Money) and wants to make sure no one else can ever write about Harry. Ah, but she forgets about fan fiction where Harry lives on forever, yeah?
As to the un-named bride: As we have been asked so many times to use our imaginations, this is just another one of those times. Whomever you ship, fancy that person as Harry's wife...lol, except maybe Luna, who I truly belive centers Harry, but isn't wife material.

haphazard1 posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 4:06pm for The Victorious Horcrux

Thanks for this fantastic exploration of how it might end. If the seventh book gives us answers as interesting and carefully thought out as yours, I will be a very happy reader indeed.

I also like the final wrap up at the end -- we get enough to see the shape of things, but with enough left open (like the bride) to make it fit our own ideas. Very nicely done.