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sylvelle posted a comment on Sunday 8th March 2015 2:02am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

LAWBOOK the ideam seems closer to a laptop computer..

AlphaPhi posted a comment on Monday 13th April 2009 11:59am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Quidditch coaches could use a StudyBook for a Playbook and also to keep track of players on the team and the competition. Could be called CoachBook. The others could be BBook for Business, MinBook For Ministry, SearchBook for research, RecipeBook for potions and recipes, and so on...

cwejr posted a comment on Wednesday 19th March 2008 3:30pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Really enjoying this story.

How about Clair Jordan. Well, it was funny to me.

Bob Officer posted a comment on Saturday 8th March 2008 12:23am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Note: Your "studybook" concept is closer to an program called "Hyperstack" which was bundled with an old Apple IIgs computer, Sometime in the late 1980s.

Nice Story even if I am just a late in finding it.

Songoku55 posted a comment on Saturday 8th December 2007 7:35pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

I love this story!

Carol Layland-Veach posted a comment on Saturday 17th November 2007 4:05am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Hi Aaran, Please forgive me for taking so long with this review. My own computer gave up the ghost and so I have to use one at my senior center. After i read your latest addition and your two requests for help I went home and started to think. Here is what I came with with.
STUDYBOOKS>a book of spells for students>GRIMOIR>grimwar>then add the type of book>Auror Grimwar or what everelse Harry can Monver the spell so that the purchaser of the book can add his/her special use for the book but the general sales add would run so: "Get your new grimwar book here and get the speciality name for 1 knut at the same time" Thus the need for the spell monger fee is met with a special price and later a magical could buy an additional personalization spell for an extra cost if it was needed. The personalization spell would be a small one and could be general in nature. And Will someone please suggest to Harry that all he has to do is look at a muggle typewriter keyboard to get all the rune substitutes that he needs for tying permanency to any spell. for instance the x used for multiplication, the apmpersand for and etc. Now as to a name for Clarinda's shop. How about FANTAMAGICAL FABRIC FABRICATIONS. Then her lable could read
Fantamagical designs by Clarinda.
Now just another word or two about how pleased I am too read this new chapter and how eagerly I await the next installment. You really do have a wonderful story going here.

jdcox61 posted a comment on Monday 12th November 2007 1:22pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

In addition, you don't have the part about Harry catching the elves speak in this story. It's in granger defense, but not here. :(

knightsbridge posted a comment on Tuesday 6th November 2007 9:26pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

I'm SO bad at naming things...but for the heck of it, and no I don't expect to see my name anywhere. In the order you listed:Legal-Eyes; WandDering;CauldrenClubbers;ProfitHider;BigBang;
(healers)PainInProgess.
Clarinda? You didn't mention if her clothes were bespoke. CJ's A Step Up
While the names are silly, you chapter, as usual was great, and it was good to see your name pop up again.
I wish you luck on your novel, and let us know the name so we can buy it
Darian

jdcox61 posted a comment on Monday 5th November 2007 9:15pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Word, good chapter. Aurors could use FileBook to keep case files in a smaller one so they can just keep them all on a shelf. The Wizenwhatsits can use one to keep bills and laws in. I mean, who couldn't use one?

Second, you should call it Clarinda's clothiers or something else like CCC, Clarinda's Contemporary Clothiers. I like that one, I find this story really great in all the areas you're going that the avg fanfic writer doesn't dare venture because they're not bright enough to collect it all together.

You, my good sir, and my hat is off to you, are a genius.

chris25 posted a comment on Sunday 4th November 2007 7:17am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Again, Very good work indeed. I especially like the links between magic and quantum mechanics, which run parallel in some ways to some of the ideas coming up in my story - assuming i ever manage to write chapters i can bear to inflict on readers. As i've said before, the traces of christian influence on this story are tasteful and give the message as (in my better moments i believe) it was originally intended, before bigots and tradition-bound morons jumped on the band wagon. The progression of the relationship with Ginny is believable, tasteful and well-written. Its a shame that fanfiction can't be published and sold, this would, or should at least, make a fortune if it could.

Fishburne posted a comment on Friday 2nd November 2007 2:39pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

WWW - Weasley Wizarding Wiki!!!

How intriguing!

You could even create a Document Naming Service or DNS that links them together to provide a Global research tool - sort of like a wizard wide network of combined storage. Imagine, just opening your new StudyBook and tapping on an index of reference material or perhaps asking for some sort of search and Bam! A list of linked references based on a numerical value of how the search was referenced...

woooo! Scary!

Kal posted a comment on Thursday 1st November 2007 11:48am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Doh!!!!! I forgot to sign the previous review! Since I couldn't edit it... Here is another. Great Job!!!!

Brian posted a comment on Thursday 1st November 2007 4:27am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

As a real business, you would want to develop a brand. One way to do that would be to stick with the *Book theme.

So:
NoteBook
RuleBook
GuideBook

etc, etc.

PhoenixAnkaa posted a comment on Wednesday 31st October 2007 2:58pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Another fabulous chapter in this unique story. It always amazes me the depth of detail you impart in your writing. It makes for a truly fascinating and enjoyable read.

And I was giving a bit of thought to your "help me" questions and had an idea for naming Clarinda's new shop. Since she will be in business with the Twins, and housed adjacent to the Triple W, how about a little play along those lines. Clarinda's Custom Clothier - trendy fashions for all occasions.

Just a thought...

PA

izoomzoom posted a comment on Wednesday 31st October 2007 12:11am for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Great story and great chapter. Keep ‘em coming!

The Book:
Siaru talked about how this book is a sort of magical wiki so “The WikiBook” or “The Mage’s WikiBook” for the generic version. Muggleborns would likely get it and the word sound that Wiki represents would probably work in the wizarding world as well. Many others have said to create specific versions for various professions. Part of the value added for those would be to add links to actual references in the subject maybe with purchasing information if Flourish and Blotts would want to buy in. No offence to WWW but stationary would more likely be sold at a book store than a joke shop.

For the shop:
The Crevasse (The Gap)
CCC (Clarinda’s Classic Clothiers)
Jordan’s (like Macy’s, Lord & Talor, Hect’s, Talbots, etc…)
Magical Outfitters (Urban Outfitters)
Clarinda Jordan (Ann Taylor, etc)
Unlimited
Diagon Alley Clothiers (I’d say haberdashery but the implies men’s clothing)

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Tuesday 30th October 2007 2:08pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

The "StudyBook" sounds like a good idea and quite plausible. I can see variations as LedgerBooks, RecordBooks, NoteBooks, etc. for at least some professions (BookBook records for Librarians?). It would be ironically amusing if they became the record-keeping medium of choice for the Spell Crafters.

As for Clarinda Jordan's shop, perhaps something simple, dignified, and classy like "Clarinda's" or "Fashions by Clarinda". You definitely want a name with a certain cachet to it.

Just my $0.02.

CootiePatootie posted a comment on Tuesday 30th October 2007 1:13pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

I have a *bunch* of suggestions:
the whole company should be called MagicalManagers
The Astronomy Archive, WizLaw Index (Whatever) where (Whatever) is replaced by "Hogwarts" or "Ministry" or "Wizengamot" or "Magical Law Enforcement" etc., The Charms Chronicle, The Witches HouseKeeper, Matters of Business, Annals of Arithmancy, The Potions Primer...where each of these can be linked to publications in their field but notes added by the individual owner/user. New publications would require a new or updated journal, of course.
As for Clarinda's store; since we're near the Wheezy's (ha ha) why not Clarinda's Contemporary Clothing, or Clothes by Clarinda? I kind of like something that reaches out to the younger generation, like "Fashion Now! for Witches and Wizards"
Well, great chapter. The StudyBook idea really is a good one. I predict rousing success! :-)
love the not-date. Personally, I thought the picnic was quite romantic and not-datey, too.
Keep up the good work; I love your stuff.

Cassie P

amulder posted a comment on Monday 29th October 2007 11:59pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Hmm, another reviewer used the word "keeper". That isn't bad either, maybe use that in combination.

- Molly's Keeper (Again, Ginny's Middle name)
(I know, the theme of hating fame crops up again and again, but from what I've learned, in business you need to learn to sell yourself.)
- the Knowledge Keeper, Memory keeper, NoteKeeper...

best,
...art

amulder posted a comment on Monday 29th October 2007 11:53pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

Book names...

- the Paper Pensieve
- Taking after "Franklin-Covey" organizers, (the one's behind the "seven habits..." you could name it the Potter-Weasley Journal, if Harry is willing to lend his name to it. Or maybe the "James-Molley" book, using their middle names
-The Nearly Never Ending Notebook

As for the shop, that's tougher
- Clarinda's Classicwear, or Clarinda's Classics
- Jordan's Everywear (a bit of a pun, but maybe...)


Nice chapter, by the by. I like the notebook idea. I like Harry being introduced to a reasonable Slytherin. I like Molly "happening" to stay up late for Harry, and yet NOT being the typical fanon overbearing mom.

There was one rather unfortunately problem... it was too short! ;-)

best,
...art

Ebbie posted a comment on Monday 29th October 2007 1:29pm for Chapter Seventeen - Business Dinner or First Date

I am really enjoying both versions of your story and can't wait to read more. How about the Magical Gap for Clarinda's store -- it has name recognition for the muggleborn, plus it is sort of bridging the gap between muggle and wizard fashions.

For researchers, you could go with the easy RefBook that would need to have customizable index features so it can be used for a variety of different projects.

How about LawBook or RuleBook for the ministry workers and/or solicitors.

Then there is a generic InfoBook that can be a multi-purpose book for families (common addresses, simple instructions on how to do things -- mom or dad can use this for their children, potions for common ailments, etc.) This multi-purpose book could have a lot of different uses, maybe even call it the _______ Family InfoBook and the purchaser can add their name to the front of the title.

If I have any other ideas, I'll let you know. I like this idea of yours -- I haven't read anything like it in other stories.

Keep writing. I am looking forward to reading more of the story soon!

Ebbie